• irmoz
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    7 months ago

    The people “struggling” to read this need to go back to children’s books. This is entirely readable.

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      7 months ago

      There are too many commas and the phrasing is awkward. The first and last two commas are grammatically incorrect.

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        7 months ago

        Removing those commas only makes it the more awkward. Don’t apply for editing jobs.

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          7 months ago

          Grammar isn’t a matter of opinion, and incorrect grammar doesn’t make anything less awkward. We’re not talking about Oxford commas, these are just wrong.

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            7 months ago

            Not discussing opinions, keep up.